Imagine you are the bear in this photograph. Describe in 100words what is happening, remember to make your writing as descriptive and exciting as possible.
I was starting to feel hungry so I came out of my dark old and dusty cave made out of huge stones and made my way down to the pond. A few minute's later I was at the pond there was lots of fish today but there was also a girl trying to catch fish on her wooden long fishing rod. I wanted the fish so what I done is I jumped in the water at that moment all I could see was water and I tried to find all the fish before she did I found one but the little girl had hundreds It was getting late the girl left so did I. I went back to my cave I eat my fish and went to sleep.
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Hannah
6/5/2014 01:36:27 am
I was fishing one evening when I saw, the biggest, fattest and most tastiest looking salmon ever. So I charged into the icy water with a splash and dunked my head straight in. It was so cold but if I didn't catch it I would not be feeding my cubs and I would be a big let down. While dashing threw the dirty water I eventually reached the enormous salmon, It was the biggest one I have ever caught so I guarded it with my life. I could not wait to get back to my den and show my cubs it.
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Adam
6/5/2014 01:42:31 am
Being a bear is good I have a big fur coat,rounded ears,a big black nose to smell with and large curved claws.My diet is fish,berries,plants and meat.I like to go to the river and fish for salmon by standing in the rapids near the waterfall and grab them out of the water air with my mouth but sometimes I stand in shallow water and grab them with my sharp claws I usually get wet when doing this.When I am full I need to find somewhere that I can dry off and relax until it is time to have fun again.
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Zoe
6/5/2014 02:18:17 am
One icy cold winters day I was strolling a long the river bank, as I was walking on it got muddier and muddier. All of a sudden it starred to rain the mud got slimy then suddenly I tumbled down the muddy bank and fell into the freeze river. I was splashing around then I found a gigantic rock so I held tightly on to it. After a while I started to get chilly and was soaking so I garbed sticks and started to pull my self up on to the ground. So after that I did not go on to the river bank anymore.
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Katie
9/5/2014 03:21:52 am
I like your work Zoe.
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Mia
13/5/2014 11:35:41 pm
I like your story Zoe
Emma
6/5/2014 04:01:05 am
Im a Brown Bear and I am searching for a few fish to snack on. I am extremely bored so I am just going to sit down and eat the fish I have caught. I am currently standing in the freezing cold water and I am shivering to death. I am getting extremely angry with the fish in this river since they are escaping when I am trying to catch them. I am sick of catching fish so I am just going to sit down and enjoy the sun and make the most of it. I love the Summer so so much!
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tegan
8/5/2014 12:33:20 am
i like your work emma it is very detailed
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Adam
12/5/2014 02:07:22 am
Very detailed work emma I read through all of it and it was awsome
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Mrs Dodds
6/5/2014 08:14:44 pm
Well done Emma and interesting piece of writing.
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Mrs Dodds
6/5/2014 08:15:52 pm
A lovely descriptive piece of writing, well done.
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Mrs Dodds
6/5/2014 08:16:55 pm
Fantastic Adam well done, you certainly know a lot about brown bears.
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Mrs Dodds
6/5/2014 08:17:58 pm
Great work Hanna, lovely use of description and emotions well done.
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Mrs Dodds
6/5/2014 08:19:19 pm
Well done Katie, some lovely description used. Remember to check through your work to see if you have use the correct tenses.
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Grace
7/5/2014 04:14:15 am
My fury brown coat was getting wet as I leapt majestically in the foamy icy river. I was trying to catch my dinner, a fresh raw fish. I could see my long black snout at the tip of my nose starting to twitch as the weather started to get extremely cold, and the water began to freeze over. Finally I caught lots of fish to keep me warm and energised. Soon I saw my family waiting patiently for me to feed them. It quickly became night and I got home safely and started to warm up. I was rather pleased to get out of the murky, icy, bubbly water.
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Mia
13/5/2014 11:37:31 pm
Great description Grace
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Xavier
7/5/2014 04:29:24 am
I am a large brown Grizzly Bear from North America. I have entered the icy cold river, trying to catch some salmon or fish as they migrate up small water falls. I know how much the salmon love the cold water. I focused intently, remaining absolutely still until my chance comes; for I am trying to catch my own dinner. I have pounced for my food, therefore making a huge splash. I am now soaked, my fur is wet through, and my paws drenched. But for me it is worth it because it means dinner for me and my cubs.
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Matthew
7/5/2014 05:18:48 am
It's great being a Brown Bear. I love it so much. Especially today. I am so glad I got up early today and got here first. The first day of the great salmon run and I am in a great position. I have the best pick of all the tastiest salmon and I could not be happier. I suppose I could be a bit happier, maybe if the water wasn't so cold, it's like ice. The best way to forget about the icy water is to catch more big silver and pink salmon, I love the way they shimmer in the water, so I will get on with it. Bring on the salmon.
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Mackayla
7/5/2014 05:28:53 am
My name is Ozey and I am a grizzly bear. I have a thick dark coat and a black wet nose also I have a sharp pair of claws. Evey year me and my fellow bears go fishing, I did it yesterday, Im going again today. When I got to the river I waited and waited for 2 hours for a samon to jump up. I got so board I tried catching flies instead,until a huge, fat, delicious looking salmon leapt out and I swiped it one. It was the most delicious salmon I have ever tasted in my life.
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Jamie
7/5/2014 05:55:50 am
My mouth was dry I had not eaten for 3 days,Then suddenly there it was a huge delicious salmon jumping and leaping out of the water. I dived in and scrambled through the water I was splashing and I was constantly dropping below the surface gasping for breath, I took one big leap out of the water and grabbed the salmon between my jaws. But then it slipped out and back into the water once again I dived beneath the water I caught the scrumptious fish in my mouth and I could not wait to get back and feed my family!
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katie
9/5/2014 03:19:15 am
I like the describing words you used Jamie.
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tegan
8/5/2014 12:47:10 am
I am a brown bear sitting in this freezing water. My feet are being nibbled at by the fish. One thing that annoys me the most is that my hands are as numb as they have ever been, even though i have a big fur coat,and i can not catch these fish. They are teasing me because i can't catch them and that is making me even more frustrated. I am frozen to the bone. i guess i will have to try in a different pond were i won't be sat under a waterfall yes that would be much better.
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Mia
13/5/2014 11:40:00 pm
I really like your story Tegan great description that bear must be really cold!
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Amy
8/5/2014 01:15:01 am
Being a bear is so much fun, it is the best experience I really like the fresh air. I like the wild because it is a great experience and I really like catching my lunch which is fish, I catch fish with my hands unlike humans do, they catch fish by a rod and that is my life as a bear.
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Joe
8/5/2014 01:53:35 am
I was starting to feel hungry but I could not find any food so I started jumping around trying my hardest to find food. Then suddenly there was a large juicy fish leaping out of the water in all directions, I went in for the kill. I was dunking and splashing in the water the fish was slipping and sliding in and out my jaws.
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Emily
8/5/2014 04:33:30 am
When I woke up in the morning my thick brown coat really made me sweat so I went into the river for a cool down when I smelt the most tasty smelling fish ever! So I looked for that fish everywhere I found it and I took it back to my cave I shared it with my cubs but before we eat it I razed through the water trying to catch the shoal of fish I saw my cubs were helping to and when we had caught most of them we sat in the cave to have them for breakfast!
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Abbie
8/5/2014 04:45:20 am
I was one day walking through a cold and dark place. Suddenly I saw a gargantuan fish that would feed my family but unfortunately someone who was fishing caught it. When they saw me they ran but they left me some food which I decided to take it to my cubs and their lovely mum. When I got back I seen that I lost some so I went back but I went through a waterfall and luckily landed on path so I was save and then I found the last peace and so I had that last peace. The end.
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katie
9/5/2014 03:20:56 am
Really good Abbie.
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Mrs Dodds
8/5/2014 05:47:21 am
Well done some lovely description used. Take care you should have used saw instead of seen.
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Mrs Dodds
8/5/2014 05:49:53 am
Some lovely language used well done Emily.
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Mrs Dodds
8/5/2014 05:51:08 am
A lovely descriptive piece of writing well done Joe.
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Mrs Dodds
8/5/2014 05:52:01 am
Very interesting Amy, although I couldn't see you as a bear.
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Mrs Dodds
8/5/2014 05:53:09 am
An interesting insight into a bears feelings, well done Tegan.
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Mrs Dodds
8/5/2014 05:54:44 am
Fantastic use of description Jamie well done I felt like I was there.
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Mrs Dodds
8/5/2014 05:55:51 am
Well done Mackayla lovely use of description.
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Mrs Dodds
8/5/2014 05:57:06 am
Well done Matthew you really captured the essence of the bear.
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Mrs Dodds
8/5/2014 05:58:23 am
A great use of description, you really captured the moment. Well done Xavier.
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Mrs Dodds
8/5/2014 06:00:15 am
Well done Grace you have used some great description.
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Mia
13/5/2014 11:17:59 pm
I was the hungriest bear in the world. I had left my family to fend for myself after all bears are the biggest creatures in the world aren`t they? I was so hungrey that all of my fur shook when my tummy rumbled, that was until i had found that waterfall! I sprang into action and caught 4 fish in one go. I think that I was going to survive after all.
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