On Christmas Day when I came down stairs there was lots of presents on the floor in one of them I got an iPad I love playing on it and I got some new games for my Xbox. Also I got a big yellow remote control car with big black wheels. When I put the batteries in it went really fast around the house so I took it outside to race my friends remote control car but my car almost crashed into a wall but quickly turned it onto the grass and still won the race.
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Jamie
6/1/2014 12:01:41 am
I awoke on Christmas morning, and my eyesight was blinded by the white,fluffy snow.I ran in my Mam and Dads room and woke them up it was early in the morning.I ran down the stairs as fast as I could, into the sitting room and saw all the wrapped presents under the tree. I opend my first present it was really cool it was a alien figure but when I put the batteries in it it took control.......
It's eyed glowed red it roared and screamed as it trashed the presents
and jumped onto the table we did not know what to do with it.
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Adam
6/1/2014 12:26:06 am
On christmas eve it was very busy in our house mam came in from work, dad was starting to prepare the vegetables for christmas dinner and me and Kieran helped tidy the house.We had our tea and then I got my onesie on and went outside to sprinkle the raindeer food on the grass.Leejohn came to visit and it was soon time to go to bed I was very excited.In the middle of the night I heard bells on the roof of our house and I picked up my torch but it was not working.I got some new batteries but when I put the batteries in it it still did not work . On christmas morning I got a new torch.
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Mason
6/1/2014 12:46:19 am
On Christmas day I went into my Mam and Dad's room and then we went down stairs and I played with my toys and I put the batteries in and it did not work so I played with the other toys and I played with the other toys for the rest of the day and the batteries ran out and I put some more batteries for it and it did not work.
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Emily
6/1/2014 01:10:36 am
On Christmas day I rushed downstairs and opened a little present and it was a boring old robot so I put it down then I saw a whole in the bottom but then I rushed in the kitchen then got some batteries put them in the robot and then it spoke and turned into a teddy bear then it told me to put my hands in front of its mouth and jelly beans came out this robot was by far my favourite present of Christmas!
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Mrs Dodds
6/1/2014 02:55:57 am
Wow that sounds like a great christmas present. Next time read through your work to check that it flows.
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Mrs Dodds
6/1/2014 02:57:11 am
What was the toy? You could have added more feeling into this by describing how you felt.
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Mrs Dodds
6/1/2014 02:58:45 am
Wow! Well done Adam this is lovely, sounds like you had a very busy Christmas Eve.
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Mrs Dodds
6/1/2014 03:01:11 am
Fantastic use of description well done Jamie. I hope this didn't really happen. Remember to check through your work to make sure your tenses are correct.
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Mrs Dodds
6/1/2014 03:02:21 am
Well done Joe a good piece of writing, it sounds like you had a lovely christmas.
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Ben
6/1/2014 11:53:48 pm
On Christmas Day I got some Christmas money. The next day we went to newcastle and bought a remote control helicopter ,when we got home, I put the batteries in it ,and it started to fly. The next day it broke ,so we took it back to the shop and got it repaired.
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Grace
7/1/2014 01:10:47 am
One day me and my friends went to the fun fair where we spent an afternoon on lots of outstanding rides. As time went by we spotted a maze that looked intriguing. We entered the maze and somehow reached the end! In front of us we saw a mysterious trapdoor. I spotted a camouflaged button on the wall. It wouldn't open and needed new batteries. Luckily I found some in the bottom of my bag. We were starting to panic, but when I put the batteries in it opened the trapdoor. We were free to go on more amazing rides!
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Matthew
7/1/2014 01:21:43 am
When I woke up on Christmas day I was so exited to go down stairs. When I opened the door I could hardly believe my eyes, they were lots of presents, I opened them one by one. When I opened my remote controlled car I couldent wait to get it out the box. It was an Audi R8 with working lights and doors,even the bonnet and boot worked, but when I put the batteries in it, it really came to life. So I took it out for a spin as there was no snow on the ground. I drove it all around the block five times it was incredible, and because it was so early It was still dark so i put the headlights on.
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Sol
7/1/2014 01:51:09 am
On Christmas day I sprang out of bed at seven o’clock and sped downstairs and tore open the wrapping paper. To my surprise I found a little box I cut through the tape, in the box lay a remote control plane! Suddenly my uncle burst through the door. I asked him if he would help me try it out. When we put the batteries in the helicopter took flight straight into the ceiling and fell to the floor in broken bits. We were both so surprised and went downstairs laughing. We told my mam and she just chuckled at us.
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Mrs Dodds
7/1/2014 05:05:54 am
Well done Sol a lovely descriptive piece of work.
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Mrs Dodds
7/1/2014 05:07:57 am
Well done Matthew, did you really get this for christmas? Remember to check your work through for spelling mistakes.
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Mrs Dodds
7/1/2014 05:10:48 am
A great try Ben, did you really buy a helicopter with your Christmas money? Remember names need a capital letter at the beginning.
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Mrs Dodds
7/1/2014 05:12:28 am
Well done a lovely twist Grace.
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Zoe
8/1/2014 12:32:23 am
On my birthday I ran down stairs and saw all of my lovely presents. I quickly opened all of them and found some money in one. So I got dressed and went to Smyths toy store. All I saw was lots of toys but I did not want a toy I wanted a camera.so we got in the car and went to PC world . When we got home i took it out of the box's, but when I put the batteries in it ,it exploded all you could hear was BANG.
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leo
8/1/2014 03:16:58 am
On Christmas morning I ran down stairs and found a colossal present under the tree for me I was so excited to open it up and it was a remote control helicopter but when I put the batteries in I suddenly dropped it and smashed in to little specs of plastic all over the floor and that was my Christmas over. I was blaring my eyes out with tears I said to my Mam " I'm very sorry Mam I will never do it again" I rapidly ran into my bedroom and watched tv and went to sleep for a hour.
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Xavier
8/1/2014 04:28:17 am
Early on a frosty Christmas morning, I woke up to a huge full stocking of presents. Once I had opened all of the presents in my stocking, I ran downstairs and saw loads and loads of presents all in brightly coloured wrapping paper. Then I picked up the biggest one of them all and tore the wrapping paper off of it, it was a battery powered dancing panda! But when I put the batteries in it, to my horror it turned evil and destroyed every other toy in the house, so there would be no competition to be played with!
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Mrs Dodds
9/1/2014 04:32:49 am
Well done Xavier, although this sounds like a nightmare christmas to me.
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Mrs Dodds
9/1/2014 04:34:47 am
Oh no Leo I hope this didn't really happen. Well done, remember to check through your writing to make sure punctuation is in the correct place.
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Mrs Dodds
9/1/2014 04:36:53 am
Well done Zoe, that's such a shame. I hope you took the camera back and got a new one. Remember to check through your writing for mistakes.
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Mrs Dodds
14/1/2014 03:50:39 am
Well done everyone, I'm really impressed at how many of you have given this a go.
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